Voice-over poem (sound)

We started off just as friends,
As time went by it felt like more.
This was a love, no limits, no end,
Ever since you walked through my door.
If only you knew how much I loved you,
The things i would have done,
just to hear you say- I love you too.
You were the only one
Why did you have to be so blind?
How could you not have seen me?
The games you played with my mind.
I can't stand knowing we will never be.

I would have done anything.
You were my everything.

(sam will be the voice of the girl saying the poem).

Plan of action feedback

We are going to improve this by using the feedback to use more editing for example use of transitions, adding music into the sequence and getting rid of footage we don't need e.g repetition of shots.

response to feedback

feedback: its just a book
response: the story is about whats in the book

feedback: each shot mores on overtime
response: the shots haven't been cut yet

feedback: made clearer - character wise etc
response: the stalkers identity needs to be secret

feedback: doesn't show the darker side
response: there could be more shots that explain the obsession

feedback: not really a setting
response: there are shots of a setting that haven't been put in yet


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FeedBack:

Editing:
good editing towards the end, makes it dramatic.
Good build up using editing.
The dark room style is good as well as zooming.

Camera Work
Shaky, could have used a tripod, middle looked good as it creates confusion :)

Sound Suggestions
Basic noise of page turning.
When lights fade go to ominous and tense music.

Mise en Sence
Not really a setting at first, no action.
got potential though.

Narrative
Its just a book, probally each shot works on overtime.
Lack of narrative, but it still makes sence.

Generic Conventions
stalker, mystery, death and threat

Other Feedback
- more build up
- less repetition of same footage
- make clearer (characters)
- make sure editing runs smoothly

start of a poem idea

If only you knew how much I loved you,
The things i would have done,
just to hear you say- I love you too.
You were the only one
Why did you have to be so blind?
How could you not have noticed me?
The games you played with my mind.
I can't stand knowing we will never be.

I would have done anything.

Ideas - layout of book

Page 1.
This will include lots of pictures of friends, a collage of everyone.
These will be friendly.

Page 2-3.
We will be continuing the friends page where there will be pictures of friends together. We are also including post-it notes with comments from the people who own the book.

Page 4-5.
We will include alot of glitter, love hearts, sequins etc.
There will be a picture of ryan in the center where we will write "Omg how cute is he??" there will be another comment underneath saying "i no i love him lol"

Page 6-7.
This is where the book may become a bit obbsessive about scott(Rian)
There will alot of hearts with scott in the middle, love notes about him, and so on....

Page 8.
There will be a poems about scott

Page9.
Obsessive pics of scott, showing the audience we have been watchimnh him.

Page 10.
Scott things we have stolen off him e.g tissues.

Page 11.
Ideas to plot and kill him.. hanging pics, stabbings, overdose.

Page 12.
Picture if him dead

Possible Names

keepsake, souvenir, remember, trophy, chase, jumanji, tome, list, imagine, vision, depict, devotion, romance, attachment, amaranthine, ceaseless, persistent, incessant, vexation, torment


FINAL NAME DECIDED:

MEMORIA- which came up as the italian translation for memories

Love poems possibly for use in the book

THE END OF THE LOVE OF MY LIFE
We knew it was real
This love that we share
You made me feel
Like there was someone to care
Then I made a mistake
That ruined it all
An error to make
A never ending fall
The ground never comes
As we continue to descend
Our hearts have broken into crumbs
And it was me who brought our end
As always, I will continue
To try again and again to break our fall
But you cannot trust me now
Not a little, not at all

LIEZ
I have it cut in my leg...
I have it written on me so that everyone can see you
cheated me and for that my heart can't hardly breathe, you
did me wrong as if are relationship was a stupid love song
but because of you everyone is going to get to know the
real me

Test shots

We have now in our group taken a few tests shots of photos to put in our book. We have taken photos of us following Rian so it looks like he is being staked. We also have tried and taken photos of ways in which we could kill Rian. However in the film his character name will be known as "Scott" We now have photos taken with "Scott" as what appears to be our friendly group, and also photos with us "hanging" around with him and it looks as if a picture is being taken with out our knowlegde, again showing the stalking and obsession.

Teacher Feedback

Your blog is looking good, it has all the key elements required in the blog. I really like your idea, it plays on the key concept of 'The Gaze' and exploring the paranoia of being watched. It is also quite a realistic storyline, a friendship gone wrong.
Make sure you put in the necessary time to make the keepsake book look as good as possible.