FeedBack:

Editing:
good editing towards the end, makes it dramatic.
Good build up using editing.
The dark room style is good as well as zooming.

Camera Work
Shaky, could have used a tripod, middle looked good as it creates confusion :)

Sound Suggestions
Basic noise of page turning.
When lights fade go to ominous and tense music.

Mise en Sence
Not really a setting at first, no action.
got potential though.

Narrative
Its just a book, probally each shot works on overtime.
Lack of narrative, but it still makes sence.

Generic Conventions
stalker, mystery, death and threat

Other Feedback
- more build up
- less repetition of same footage
- make clearer (characters)
- make sure editing runs smoothly

Ideas - layout of book

Page 1.
This will include lots of pictures of friends, a collage of everyone.
These will be friendly.

Page 2-3.
We will be continuing the friends page where there will be pictures of friends together. We are also including post-it notes with comments from the people who own the book.

Page 4-5.
We will include alot of glitter, love hearts, sequins etc.
There will be a picture of ryan in the center where we will write "Omg how cute is he??" there will be another comment underneath saying "i no i love him lol"

Page 6-7.
This is where the book may become a bit obbsessive about scott(Rian)
There will alot of hearts with scott in the middle, love notes about him, and so on....

Page 8.
There will be a poems about scott

Page9.
Obsessive pics of scott, showing the audience we have been watchimnh him.

Page 10.
Scott things we have stolen off him e.g tissues.

Page 11.
Ideas to plot and kill him.. hanging pics, stabbings, overdose.

Page 12.
Picture if him dead

Test shots

We have now in our group taken a few tests shots of photos to put in our book. We have taken photos of us following Rian so it looks like he is being staked. We also have tried and taken photos of ways in which we could kill Rian. However in the film his character name will be known as "Scott" We now have photos taken with "Scott" as what appears to be our friendly group, and also photos with us "hanging" around with him and it looks as if a picture is being taken with out our knowlegde, again showing the stalking and obsession.

Shot list

Shot 1
Blurred shot coming in from doorway, into a room where the book is on the floor. open to back page

Shot 2
Move in to close up of the books back page.

Shot 3
First picture of rians character murdered on the floor

Shot 4
Goved hand turning pages back - you see pictures/ drawings of planning how rian can be killed

Shot 5
Turn back page to new image of obsessed scribbles of hearts and i love rian slogans/ pictures with his food wrappers etc maybe a few titles

shot 6, 7, 8.....
Turn back pages in simular way showing pictures of people and actions of us with ryan e.g picking up his tissues... maybe a few titles

3rd to last shot
happy friendly pictures of samantha, louise and charlotte with rian and other people all as friends laughing and having fun.

2nd to last shot
flick back page-see titles written eg names of producers etc

final shot
turn to front cover- the title of the film is written on the front.